Welcome back to blogathon a blogging marathon! This time
am sharing some important stuff. For our report we had to do a writing sample.
am sharing some important stuff. For our report we had to do a writing sample.
THE BUSH
I was so scared at the sight of the humongous trees arching over me.
I was quivering with fear my friend next to me called Rose swore to me that she saw some
thing moving in the bushes. I was now freaking out since we are in Canada Rose whispered
“There could be a bear”. It was freezing it was minus 100 degrees, well it felt like it.
It was minus 20 degrees “People die out here” my friend said trying to comfort me.
As you can tell she is obviously the worst at it. We were starting to realize that
something was wrong we were looking around for any signs of direction.
I then caught something in the corner of my eye…..
I tapped Rose on the shoulder. I quivered while saying “You were right about one thing”. I was quivering with fear my friend next to me called Rose swore to me that she saw some
thing moving in the bushes. I was now freaking out since we are in Canada Rose whispered
“There could be a bear”. It was freezing it was minus 100 degrees, well it felt like it.
It was minus 20 degrees “People die out here” my friend said trying to comfort me.
As you can tell she is obviously the worst at it. We were starting to realize that
something was wrong we were looking around for any signs of direction.
I then caught something in the corner of my eye…..
There was a brown bear about 10 meter away from Rose I shouted “Rose quickly play dead”
she did as I said. The bear looked me I was hard out sweating while lying on the ground acting dead.
I saw Rose crying the brown bear was smart and walked away. Then I shouted
“Good news or bad news” she shouted “Good news”. I shouted back
“Well we got away from that bear” then I quickly shouted.
“The bad news is that there is a black bear coming for us”.
I said “run black bears are way more intelligent than brown bears”.
We quickly ran and ran and ran and ran and ran all the way to a cottage.
Where we now call our home that is the END!
she did as I said. The bear looked me I was hard out sweating while lying on the ground acting dead.
I saw Rose crying the brown bear was smart and walked away. Then I shouted
“Good news or bad news” she shouted “Good news”. I shouted back
“Well we got away from that bear” then I quickly shouted.
“The bad news is that there is a black bear coming for us”.
I said “run black bears are way more intelligent than brown bears”.
We quickly ran and ran and ran and ran and ran all the way to a cottage.
Where we now call our home that is the END!
Hello Lydia, I really like your writing! It pulls me in and I can really understand where you are and the setting. I loved how instead of saying "I was so scared of the humongous trees *ARCHING* over me" Instead of saying something boring like "I was scared of the trees" Well done I like your blog keep it up!
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hello Lyds
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your story on the bush you had some good descriptive language I love how even though it was short it was still very interesting and kept me reading reading how ever I still think that you and rose could of had a more interesting ending like the rest of the exciting story.
from Frankie
Hey Lyd, I really love your writing it really pulls me in and I love how you made it felt like I was there with you. Keep up the great work!
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